John,
In the beginning of the paper you had commented that you feel like this needs a lot of work. It needs some work, but not as much as you may think. I mean I know most of it still needs to be written but I like where you're going with it. I really liked how on page 3 you stated, "This paper seeks to serve as an introduction to the world of music..." You said exactly what I along with other readers want to hear. Why are you writing this paper? What am I going to get out of it? And that one sentence helped me understand that.
Chelsea,
I love Stumbleupon, and yes I believe it is to cure boredom! I'm going to be honest though, the first paragraph did not draw me in at all, but the second one did. I also thought you conclusion was well thought out but I'm looking for all the inbetween. Why use Stumbleupon instead of just searching google? What's the history behind it? I know this might be hard because there is not a lot of exact information on Stumbleupon itself but I'm looking forward to reading the finish product.
